FANFIC: A Vicious New Villain

I am currently in the process of writing and drawing a series of comics. (Fan made of course) All of which involving original characters I have been developing for the past two years in my spare time. I finally spent the time to write down some of my ideas instead of just drawing them. I specialize in villains and of course my Fan Site is geared towards rogues.

My villain is dressed as a mime, he is not a Joker knock off. I recently have been dissapointed to hear of Pierrot Lunaire a villain appearing in Batman R.I.P. storyline who is very similar to my character. My character is completley original of Pierrot Lunaire and I only learned of him after the fact.

Before you read let me characterize the scene. My villain remains nameless during the scene, he will later be called the Mime, Murder Mime, or Murderous Mime via the media. He has black messy medium to short hair. Face painted white with black lipstick, black diamons around eyes along with black eyeliner, black dots painted on cheeks, his ears are gauged with smaller black gauges. He wears a black/white striped 3/4 sleeve shirt and black pants. He also wears white gloves and black shoes. He looks of a traditional mime with some rockish elements to him.

Scene 1:
Night time in front of a house in a suburban neighborhood. Lights can be seen on through the windows. A broken mirror in the bathroom is covered with blood on some of the shards. Then pans to living room where 4 people a family are tied up to chairs bound and gagged. Dad, Mom, teenage boy, and young daughter. The entire family is bloody and from the looks have been tied up for some time and have been tortured. The mother and teenage boy's heads hang down obviously dead. Gashes across their necks ear to ear. The mime with a smile on his is next to the daughter as the dad helplessy watches. All have several cuts and stabs from the torture. The mime kneels down to the girl puts a broken shard of the mirror (his weapon for the ordeal) to the girls throat, takes off her gag, and leans over and whispers in her ear. She shakes her head in response, he whispers again. She then mutters to her father "If you have been wondering when you hear his voice, its the last you ever hear..". As soon as the words leave her lips he slashes her throat and smiles as blood pours out of the wound. Smiling he walks over to the father who is now sobbing after seeing the last of his family slaughtered. He removes his gag and walks circles around him. The father says "Kill me, I longer fear death, I watched you torture and kill my family I have nothing left to live for, KILL ME!". The mime stops walking, stands in front of the man no longer smiling and stares into his eyes. The man screams "KILL ME! Or is it not as fun when I'm not afraid!?!". The mimes face turns into an angry frown and he cuts the man's cheek with the shard. The man repeats "KILL ME YOU SICK F%*K!". The mime begins smiling again and shakes his head and begins to walk away. Still screaming the man says "KILL ME... I want to die just end my life...". The mime then turns back around approaches the man and grabs his face. He lifts the mirror shard to his mouth and proceeds to cut out the man's tounge as he is screaming in pain. Blood flows from the mans mouth down his chin and the mime walks of again. The man attempts to scream again "Kwill Ma!!!" the man tries to say as the mime leaves him alone with the corpses of his family.

Scene 2:
It is now day and outside the house with police cars and crime scene tape in front of the house. Inside a man bends over examining the dead bodies while a man behind him takes notes. "What kind of whacko would kill torture and kill an entire family?". The other man asks "Where is the father?". The man who is bending down replies "At a hospital, he has to be watched at all times. He already tried to commit suicide twice since we found and freed him. Can't get much out of him since he is missing his tounge. Only thing we could make out was 'Mime'...". The other man says "Thats why he was left alive, the sicko knew he wanted to die after what happened, so to torture him further he left him alive... This guy is deranged..." The bending over man returns standing up and outs a piece of cloth in a bag and says "No fingerprints, no DNA, nothing! Only this cloth which might not even be from him... The guy is definatly no amature. So far we got three other unsolved murders that are looking similar... BUT still no f%*cking link...". The two men walk out of the house and enter a police car and drive off.

That is just an intro of the killer. I wanted to start out the story showing what this man is capable of and how deranged he is. Throughout most of the story you rarely have any murder scenes just afterwards at the crime scene so I wanted to kind of give the audience something that would open their imaginations up to exactly what this man is doing while he is killing. To go with his gimmick as a mime he does not speak unless he is whispering into the victims ear right before he kills them. So throughout ALMOST the entire story you do not hear him speak at all. When he breaks character it is quite shocking and gives a twist in the story. It is not a simple cop/killer story there is a costumed hero in this who served more as a detective throughout (batman esque). I can't give much away on the hero as I'm trying not to spill to much until it is finished. The mime is however very good at hand to hand combat and is pretty hand with knives. This makes for some interesting fight scenes later on.

Let me know what you think. Constructive criticism is highly welcomed, I just do not want any ignorant people reading this and completly bashing it. I respect everyone's opinions but please express them in a respectful and appropriate manner. I will post a picture of the mime when I finish a current drawing of him I am working on. Hope you enjoyed and want to hear more of this story and the characters.